Ghostbusters 3 : A proposal.

Ghostbusters 3 (Written in 2005)

So Dan Ackroid produced a script in 1999. It's in limbo because the studio believes it to be expensive to produce. They know the actors will want MORE money and it will have to have a competitive budget. There minds may have been at ease if the script was good, But it would seem that The Ghostbuster where meeting hades the god of the underworld and New York was becoming manhellton!! due to an over flow in...hell. hmmm..that's a bit heavy. On top of that the orig. ghost busters where side notes and a new younger bunch would have taken over......Now that won't do! SO hears where i think it should go.

Ghostbusters 3

(direction)

Don't ditch the original Four!! There's no need to go to younger NEW Ghostbusters....YET!. If Sylvester Stallone can do RAMBO IV with a possible return as rocky and william shatner can turn 50 for star trek 2 deal with it then continue for 5 more movies through out the rest of the 80's and early 90's and still be a space hero AND then still consider reprising his role if enterprise went another season THEN there's no reason the original ghost busters can't continue to be our on screen heroes!

Treat New York Better. Ghostbusters 2 got a little hokey (well maybe more then a little) New yorkers forgot about them having saved the city 5 years earlier, the citizens are accused of treating each other so badly that a ectoplasmic mood slime infests the underground and causes paranormal experiences. Show the decent side of the city, Like since the end of GB 2 things got better. There are a lot of good things to dwell on.

This time out New Yorkers DO remember what the Ghostbusters have done for them and are local heroes. On there wall should be the magazine covers they made from the first film. They've gained acceptance and have neighbourhood BBQs, where they tell stories. They get waved at from passers by....people are now nice to the Ghostbusters.

Peter Vankman and Dana should still be together, use Oscar.....don't forget about him!
He should be involved with the Ghostbusters in some compasity but not be directly in the main crew (yet) He should help them indirectly.

Rick Morranis character Lewis should should have been training as a Ghostbuster as well as being there accountant and would have been in reserve since '89. He still doesn't see as much action as he's like. They have good joking stories about times he's come along!
He has saved there lives legitimately One time, But they won't admit it.
Sample...

VANKMAN
This is our honorary reserve Ghostbuster

LEWIS
When do I get to be a REAL Ghostbuster?

VANKMAN

( Smiles )

Soon.

In the beginning they should go on some nice common haunting case, perhaps on as easy as.....

ENT. OLD HOUSE

specter floats in

The Ghostbusters collectively decide on elaborate plans for capture

SPECTER

Moan.....

STANTZ

( Hesitation)

Do you know your dead?

SPECTER

Stops moaning, ponders for a minute. Smiles, then disappears


Another scene in the first act.

EXT. STREET ---DAY

VENKMAN

Walking down the street towards the head quarters in full GB gear with a visitor accompanying him for the first time.

In background we see...

MAN runs by a WOMAN and snatches her purse. WOMAN shrieks

VANKMAN

quickly turns, calmly pulls out his proton gun and in one smooth motion zaps the perpetrator.

MAN goes down, the WOMAN Runs up and grabs her purse back then turns to Vankman smiles ans waves thanks.

VANKMAN
smiles in his accomplishment waves and turns to continue his walk

VISITOR
Impressed but confused, turns a couple times to look at the not moving man and at Vankman.

VISITOR

He's ah....He's not moving.....you..didn't.....ummmmm.....

VANKMAN

OH, no,no. He'll be fine.

( smiles )

This things set to stun.

walks O.C.

With all the super hero movies that have come and gone (and are coming) The best ones critically and commercially are the ones that have treated the world these characters inhabit as a real world. Very close to our own, with maybe minor changes to suit the plot.

Mutant legislation, spider-man on the cover of the paper ect. This is the world the Ghostbusters need to inhabit.

Our world where they've been heroes for some time. Where goofy plots and bad character development won't cut it. Tell a GOOD story set in the real world and the actors will want to sign on. The studio will like it, especially if it's not dependent on special effects in the end if it's a strong story and contender for box office dollars the effects budget will be there.


The Ghostbusters CAR. It is an imported part of the back ground of this movie and will help tell a compelling story so don't forget to treat it like a character not a prop. It got massively upgraded for movie Two and these upgrades along with the car should now be aging.

The car need to be in a situation at the beginning of the movie where it has seen better days. Ray loves that car and doesn't want to replace it. It's engine is in fine shape it just needs a over haul.

ENT. Ghostbusters garage

Ghost busters in foreground talking. In background the GB car losses a rim and a roof thingy.

EGON

( In flat voice )

We need to do some thing about that car.

STANTZ

( turns to look )

Oh, I don't know I kind of like it that way it is. It has....personality.

VENKMAN

( turns to look at the car then at ray )

RAY! I thought we discussed trading it in last month.

STANTZ

Peter! It's the GHOSTBUSTER car! You can't get rid of a classic, it's like.....one of the family.....I love that car!!

VANKMAN

Turns in defeat on this issue to notice the t.v. behind the reception desk. It is showing a episode of Pimp my ride.

The other two turn to look as he is smiling staring off.

VANKMAN

Are you guys thinking what I'm thinking?

STANTZ

Peter you can't!

EGON

raises a scientific device to the t.v and then to ray in interest.

VANKMAN

still smiling strolls over to the desk with a computer and phone. He sits triumphantly tapping a few buttons on the key board. finds what he's looking for He picks up the phone, dials.

VANKMAN

( on phone )

Hi MTV, this is Peter Vankman.

Yep, the Ghostbusters. We've saved the city a few times and I was wondering if you'd Pimp our ride?

Cut to West coast custom garage, film crew around.

The shop crew are standing around the converted Eccto 1

Xzibit is standing in front

Xzibit

Are you ready to see what we've done to your ride?

Vankman is all smiles

Egon is very intently interested

Stantz is sweating and shaking his head in response.

Xzibit pulls the cover off, WE see the old car (Really, no faking this!!!) all pimped out, but in a more functional manner then a comfort one or simply astatically pleasing with a lot of woofers and screens!!

Peter is astounded

Egon is very pleased with the new Functioning equipment and gizmos

Ray is happy that his old car is still under there!


Janine should still be there as a secretary as well AS a honorary investigator who dosn't wear the GB gear like the honorary Ghostbuster Lewis. She should discover the main plot device with Lewis at her side while sent out on a low priority mission. some where isolated.

Note on the containment system and slimer.

What to do with slimer? He was made a big deal in the cartoon and featured in GB 2. Although he could be left out I don't fell that's the way to go. Perhaps the ghostbusters want to play a prank and wonder if there would be any favorable specters in the containment unit that could help them.....

NO of course not! It seems cruel to indefinitely hold a sentient entity in a containment unit (rebuilt with money form the city of course) It should be explained that after a time there energy dissipates and they are no longer bound to the earth plane.

VANKMAN

After there energy dissipates they go off to a better place......hopefully!......We think.

SO they could find slimer and offer him candy bars with simple hand gestures suggesting he get in to a container....he falls for it and they use him in a prank. He does NOT talk...continues making wired uncomfortable noises. and they treat him well.

PECK

He can still be a detractor of the Ghostbusters

PECK

They stole the statue of Liberty! Unleashed a bunch of ghosts on the city

( breaths for a sec , realizing his last contemplate is weak he over emphasizes )

USE UNLICENSED equipment!

He can be in this movie as long as he has something to do, he must have a pourpose.

AGE! this must be addressed as I mention earlier this can be over come on screen easily, they have to deal with it a bit and move on. There still able for action and there minds are as sharp as they ever where... Having a scene with a older man where they take off in to action or he helps as well will make them look great!!

These are still the same people we met in the '84 movie, they are our heroes, they are the GHOSTBUTERS.

k.h.

STAR TREK 2009

Excitement for a full year, sneaking in Internet trailers even though I'm fully aware the less I know going in the better. Even reading a few early reviews. I found out too much, Even DIGG.com helpfully let me know in the comments that Vulcan gets the gun. Now after seeing this hotly anticipated movie which is the first new big screen Trek in Eight years and having digested it for a couple of days I feel that some things aren't sitting with me quite right. Is It nit picking , possibly but more then that movies want and need repeat business and for that to be archived the movie should coalesce in to one big ball of sense.

If I had to sum up my experience in one parse it would be; STAR TREK, One big plot hole covered in a hard candy shell.

It looks Great , it's exciting we get the warm glow of seeing old familiar characters again but it ultimately doesn't sustain over a long period of time.

The Beginning is well done and it was smart to start the story with out a explanation of what it is coming through the anomaly (a black hole we find out later). It was nice to see that a Star ship after all is not so easily destroyed even against a much stronger foe. Too many times have other ships then the enterprise been destroyed with one or two shots, this was good. The Kalvin takes a beating and the captain quite quickly realizes he can not win "there's no help out hear for us" he proclaims while walking down a corridor to meet his doom with Kirk senior at his side. Well he was right of course and when Nero the renegade (aren't they always) Romulan kills him with a sweet ass pike thingy we get the quick cut away to keep the rating down. luckily they employed a clever bio monitoring device and this tactic worked well. We know he's dead, imaginations run wild as to how impaled he had became. Nero finds out just what year he's in since he really had no idea what happened to him going through the black hole, Kirk senior
helms the Kelvin Right in to Neros advanced ship as his wife gives birth to James Tiberius Kirk in a escape shuttle. Not before they have the discussion on what to name him of course. The Kelvin explodes in to it's target and the plot moves on.

This was a strong opening. The problem with this opening and with most of the movies plot is that they wanted to show the origins of Kirk , how he met spock, how he became captin of the enterprise and the answer is we will never know. Every thing that happens from this point on , even the shuttle craft birth and especially the death of Kirk seniour did not happen in the original time line. Old Spock is quite clear that in the proper history Kirk did get to know his father and that is why he joined star fleet. This is a new time line and anything is possible going forward.

Major logic holes:

Old Spock was dropped off on to a barren ice planet to watch his home die. Sadly he is just a walk away form a base where Montgomery Scott is situated and old Spock has the equation to Trans beaming. Which is used to get back on the Enterprise while in warp but also Scotty says that with his theory he can beam people even to adjacent planets in the same system. Vulcan would seem to qualify so he could have beamed Spock to his home with enough time to warn them had he sought out the base.

When the Drill is attacking earth Young Spock attacks it and severs the drill head. Where where all the Vulcan planetary defences and ships when they where being attacked? Could they not have severed it as well?

At the end of the Film Spock Prime reflects to him self , "trusters full head" almost happily as a memory. The problem is this is not the proper past there future is not his past he knows this.

When Nero confronts Kirk saying he will kill him like he killed his father, on paper this is a nice line. In the logic of the film he would have had no idea he killed his father as he only spoke with the captain of the Kelvin on screen and in person. Even if he had some historical federation data to find out his father was a crew member he would still not know if he was still on the ship on had escaped in a shuttle craft.



There's been so much time travailing in Star trek that Spock prime would not be content to leave the time line as it is and help resettle a new planet. Not only did billions of Vulcans die but all the future Vulcans he knows will not exist and that includes Savik. Since the time line was messed with by Nero he should have been compelled to set it right. Destroying the whole planet seemed a quite heavy. All historical culture lost, people present and future gone. I think it would have been as effective if they had just destroyed a major city.

Spock would do the travel around the sun trick and prepare vulcan for the oncoming doom.